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Time Husk November 5 2009 5:00 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send Time Husk a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music  View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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I've been writing these little haikus lately after another read/watch thru of "Fight Club",I can't explain why but it makes me happy.
"Burn your books,Stare into the sun"
Thats one of the first ones outside of a classroom setting I ever wrote. Im just wondering if anyone who writes in their personal time has any haikus they have wrote that they feel comfortable enough to post please do,thank you.
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baby britain November 5 2009 5:02 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send baby britain a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music   View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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that's not a haiku.

Wes Mantooth November 5 2009 5:04 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send Wes Mantooth a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music   View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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quote:
Originally posted by: bryana

that's not a haiku.



quote:
Originally posted by: bryana

that's not a haiku.



quote:
Originally posted by: bryana

that's not a haiku.
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I got haikus
crazy spliffs with dutch masters
crunchy ass tunes

Time Husk November 5 2009 5:08 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send Time Husk a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music   View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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I thought it was,thanks alot english class teachers for letting me sleep thru your stupid classes for jerks. Even though my moms an english teacher I thought that classified itself as a Haiku because there is a meaning behind the words,im stoned sorry/

Gatsby November 5 2009 5:09 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send Gatsby a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music   View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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Haikus are 5, 7, and 5 syllables

Time Husk is missing
the simplicity that is
writing Haikus right
brian. November 5 2009 5:10 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send brian. a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music   View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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TIME HUISK
TIME HUISK
TIME HUISK

Time Husk November 5 2009 5:11 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send Time Husk a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music   View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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quote:
Originally posted by:Gatsby

Haikus are 5, 7, and 5 syllables

Time Husk is missing
the simplicity that is
writing Haikus right


So if I changed it to:
Burn your books,
stare into the sun,
you can never leave.

Is that right?

adam. November 5 2009 5:12 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send adam. a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music   View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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2 out of 3 lines are still wrong.

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MEGAFAIL!

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How about

burn your books with sin
stare into the sun's bright light
you can never leave.

brian. November 5 2009 5:18 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send brian. a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music   View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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in my sleep
unsuspecting
put a gun to my head
i hate my pathetic life

Time Husk November 5 2009 5:19 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send Time Husk a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music   View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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quote:
Originally posted by:Gatsby

How about

burn your books with sin
stare into the sun's bright light
you can never leave.


I don't like that though,i quit haa. and i accept total failure.
Eric J. November 5 2009 5:20 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send Eric J. a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music   View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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quote:
Originally posted by:brian.

in my sleep
unsuspecting
put a gun to my head
i hate my pathetic life
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I should've just said I like to write small little things.
quote:
Originally posted by:Eric J.

quote:
Originally posted by:brian.

in my sleep
unsuspecting
put a gun to my head
i hate my pathetic life



Always forget how awesome Grief is man.I don't listen enough these days.

Gatsby November 5 2009 5:23 PM      Edit Message   Reply with a quote   QuickQuote   Send Gatsby a Private Message!   Add User To Friend List   Remove User From Friend List   Block User   View this person's music   View Blogs for this user   This is a premium member
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quote:
Originally posted by: Time Husk

quote:
Originally posted by:Gatsby

How about

burn your books with sin
stare into the sun's bright light
you can never leave.


I don't like that though,i quit haa. and i accept total failure.



well, I just added words to make it the proper syllable.

sound out the words and say them slow to count the syllables:

burn/your/books/with/sin - 5
stare/in/to/the/sun's/bright/light - 7
you/can/ne/ver/leave. -5

make sense?

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